作文题25.0分
英语

假设你是李华。昨天你参加了学校组织的演讲比赛,并获得一等奖。由于刚回美国度假的外籍教师Brooke对你的参赛提供了许多帮助,现在你想用英语给他写一封电子邮件,内容包括:

1.介绍参赛情况;   2.告知获奖;   3.表达获奖感受。

词数:100字左右,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。

Dear Brooke,

I am writing to tell you that I took the English Speech Contest held in my school yesterday.

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Yours,                                                                   Li Hua

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正确答案

参考范文

Dear Brooke,

I am writing to tell you that I took the English Speech Contest held in my school yesterday.As the only one from my class.I had to challenge the other l5 excellent participants selected from the whole school.When it came to me to present,I got a little bit nervous at first,but soon I calmed down at the thought of your words and suggestions.As you predicted,everything went smoothly and I performed perfectly.Although the question-and-answer section was the most challenging,I managed to get through it properly with the techniques you taught me.When the judge announced the result, I wasn’t at all surprised but quite excited! I got the first prize in the contest,which I couldn’t imagine months ago.Thank you very much for your unselfish and careful help.

I’m looking forward to your return to China. I’d like to show you the contest vedio.

Yours,

Li Hua

解析

本题考查对别人服务表示感谢的话题,属于书信体裁,根据材料中提供的要点信息,可以写成三段论样式的文章。学生可联系生活适当发挥,表述连贯即可。

解题思路

这是一篇电子邮件格式的文章。主要人称为第一人称,基本时态以一般现在时为主。首先是写参加英语演讲比赛的经过。接着写获奖是因为对方的帮助,从而表示感谢。最后写希望收到对方的来信。同学们基本上只要列举出几个方面即可。一方面,要注意文章的结构,如As the only one from my class......When it came to me to present..... As you predicted,等可以让文章成为一个整体,更为流畅。另一方面,还要注意交际的得体性,如文章可使用I’m looking forward to ....等, 使句式多样、语气较为婉转。参考词汇和短语:challenge, participants, As you predicted,go smoothly, announce......可以让文章成为一个整体,更为流畅。文章可使用As you predicted, I’m looking forward to ....等, 使句式多样、语气较为婉转。

易错点

格式错误,这是一封电子邮件,文章的结构已基本给出, 注意落款。